I recently discovered a
new author or, more accurately, an old author who is new to me. Her name is Elizabeth
Cadell, and the first book I read was The
Fledgling.
In some ways, I’m
surprised that I liked the book. It begins with an omniscient narrator and long
passages of “telling” rather than showing. Omniscient narrators have gone out
of style because it is hard to do them correctly, and most sound like failed
efforts at third-person point-of-view. Fortunately, Cadell gets it right.
She also manages to
succeed with her “telling.” The longest passages come at the beginning of The Fledgling and soon give way to
mostly showing. But the telling in the early passages did not bother me,
probably for the same reason that I don’t mind the telling that often begins
books by classic authors such as George Eliot and Charles Dickens. It’s what I
call flavor-added telling because it is seasoned with salt and pepper and other
spices.
The Fledgling is the story of a ten-year-old girl who was living in
Portugal and is now being sent to school in England. Illness keeps her original
travelling companions at home, so an acquaintance of Tory’s father is
substituted at the last minute. Here are some examples of the flavor-added
telling that Cadell uses to introduce her protagonist.
Tory, sent down before dinner to be presented to [Mr.
Darlan], disliked him on sight, and resented being spoken to as though she was
six instead of ten. But she had long ago perfected the art of concealing her
feelings, and reminded herself that if he had not offered to travel with her,
she might have been sent by air in the care of a TAP hostess, thus missing the
novel experience of two nights on a train. After the exchange of a few polite
sentences, she was permitted to retire, and Mr. Darlan, having no powers of
divination, filed her as a mousey, well-mannered little thing, not pretty and
certainly no conversationalist; one of those tongue-tied children out of whom
monosyllables had to be dragged.
* * *
Young as [Tory] was, every servant in the house knew her
discretion to be absolute; their secrets were as safe with her as hers were
locked within herself.
* * *
[Tory] sat motionless but relaxed, her expression serious and
attentive, her mind elsewhere, lending as always a dutiful eye and a deaf ear.
She never fidgeted, never interrupted; she had never been heard to contradict.
She agreed with everything that was planned for her, and made her own
arrangements later, for she had discovered that the easiest way through life
was to set out obediently upon the appointed path and then slip away down a
side turning.
Cadell could have said, “Tory
was a quiet child who kept her thoughts to herself.” That is pure telling, and
it’s boring. Or the author could have shown Tory acting compliant in public but
doing something contrary in private, but that would have taken more time. So she
uses flavor-added telling to draw the reader in. Cadell announces Tory’s
personality, as in pure telling, but also gives us examples that help us see
her as a person rather than a description. And this element of “sight” nudges
the passage closer to the showing line.
I believe in showing
rather than telling most of the time.
But flavor-added telling
has its own charm.